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✦ { Cyian } Withered Roses

Client: Sahityasikharghosh

Reviewer: iburnrice

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Souls Meet

Soul's meet is a beautifully crafted poem, that effective captures the magic of an unexpected connection

It's rich imagery and engaging dialogue make it an enjoyable read. It has vivid and engaging imagery, smooth transition from admiration to dialogue, strong thematic foundation, conversational tone towards the end. Refining the rhythm and slightly toning down some of the exaggerated descriptions would elevate it further.

Sweet and Sour

Sour and Sweet offers a heartfelt exploration of evolving emotion within a friendship. The authentic dialogue and reflective tone draw readers into the narrator's internal world. With slight refinements in imagery and pacing, the poem can further elevate its emotional impact.

I Was In Love

I was in love effectively captured the delicate transition from friendship to romantic love, with a relatable narrative and consistent structure. By refining cultural reference and enriching imagery, the poem can achieve greater emotional impact and universality.

Near, but yet so far

Near, but yet so far is a poignant and well structured poem that effectively converts the theme of missed opportunity. The consistency of style through the poem helps tie the chapters together , and the emotional weight of the protagonist's near-miss is effectively conveyed. With a bit more emotional depth and context, the poem could elevate the narrative even further.

Last Days

Last Days is a poignant and reflective poem that captures the complexities of love, loss, and the internal conflict that often accompanies success. Shekhar's sense of regret and sorrow is conveyed beautifully through the rhyme and imagery. The contrast between his achievements and the emotional void he feels due to the fading relationship with Evelyn adds depth to the narrative. While the poem is impactful in its current form, further exploration of the emotional disconnection and Evelyn's perspective could strengthen the overall emotional resonance. It's a well-written piece that truly captures the sorrow of unspoken love and the aftermath of relationships that fade into memory.

Full Review

General Overview:

The collection presents a poignant and emotive narrative of unrequited love, deep emotional turmoil, and the beauty of an unspoken connection between two people. The poem covers a span of events, feelings, and realizations, weaving a story of a blossoming relationship that ultimately fades. Through lyrical moments, the narrator's voice creates a tangible sense of longing, vulnerability, and an emotional journey from bliss to heartache.

Form & Structure:

The poem is composed of a narrative structure that unfolds over multiple chapters. Each section is a vignette, reflecting key moments in the protagonist's relationship with Evelyn.