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✦ { Kamila } SILVIA BENSON (MINE TO HAVE)

Client: shytabby

Reviewer: Kamila_DeRico

Summary: 10/10

I have nothing to say. Your summary is perfect! I love how seamless it is. You introduce the characters, with relevant information about them, clear goals and conflicts. That coupled with the clear formatting and the perfect grammar? I think your summary was exceptionally written.

Cover: 10/10

Your cover is aesthetically pleasing. The fonts are bold and contrast well with the background, making them easily readable.

Title: 10/10

I like how your title is very specific to your book, with key things like the main character's name on it. That way, it can't be ripped off and put into another book. It is short and easy to remember. The words 'Mine to Have' gives you a sense of what you're getting into without spoiling the plot.

Plot: 6.5/10

The book follows Silvia Benson who desperately wants to gain the approval of her boss in order to fufil her dream of being a Family Lawyer.

First, I like what you did with making Silvia doubt her decision when she was actually given a case pertaining to family law. Upon seeing how messy and unstable things can get, especially affecting children in divorce cases, it's only natural that Silvia might hesitate in her decision.

I also like the relationship dynamics between Silvia and her boss. She really wants to show her worth to him, but everytime she successfully completes an assignment, her boss finds another way to throw her off track. I feel this is very reminiscent of real bosses in our everyday lives. So nice work!

However, the book seems to have a side story going that none of the readers were warned about. The story about Shelley's life.

Not only is this massive part of the book not talked about in the summary, but it also seems to be entirely and completely unrelated to the main plot. Shelley has her own conflicts, her own life that has nothing to do with Silvia. And these scenes happen even before we actually see Silvia and Shelley meet face to face.

They also don't start after five chapters or more when we're fully grounded with our main characters. No! They start in chapter two when we barely even knew anything about our main characters. Especially with this line hitting you immediately chapter two is opened:

"I stared in disbelief at the two pink lines on the pregnancy test clutched in my trembling hands."

So the readers are like, what? How did Silvia get pregnant? And it only fuels our confusion as Shelley is not named until the very end of her point of view.

She also seems to have more screentime than Silvia, with compelling conflicts that makes her story very interesting. This makes Silvia seem more like a side character.

Suggestions

1. Since Shelley's story has nothing to do with Silvia, why not cut it out and make it a separate book on its own.

2. If she really is an important character in Silvia's life, then save all these backstory for when both these characters have actually met to avoid confusion.