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✦ { Kamila } The Experiments

Client: scifi_lover4

Reviewer: Kamila_DeRico

Title: 10/10

"THE EXPERIMENT" is brief and to the point, encapsulating the book's overall premise really well.

It also sparks intrigue as to what these experiments might be, compelling readers to continue reading.

Cover: 8/10

The cover reflects the characters' supernatural abilities, which ties well into the story.

However, in terms of quality, there's room for improvement. Right now, it seems like a stock image with the title plastered on it. Appeal is an important aspect in covers that pull readers in; therefore, I suggest redesigning the cover with stronger visual appeal.

You could also look into cover shops for a custom-made design.

Summary: 10/10

I absolutely love your summary.

It packs tension, stakes and conflict into one blurb, perfectly setting up the book and raising intrigue to move to chapter one.

I love how you've clearly established what's at risk if the characters fail. It sets that unease in us, that suspense that leaves us itching to know what happens next.

Plot: 4/10

First off, I'd like to say, you've got a lot going on in your plot, but it's written in a way that intertwines everything so it doesn't feel overwhelming.

That said, there are still some issues that need addressing. And we'll start right at the heart of it: powers.

It is established early on that the subjects might unlock supernatural abilities after the experiments. But the origins of the powers feel underdeveloped.

Yes, the serum unlocks their supernatural abilities. But, what is this serum? Do kids already have latent abilities that it unlocks? Why only children—are adults incapable of developing powers?

None of these very important questions were answered or hinted at throughout the entire course of the book.

Then, when it comes to power usage, there's quite a bit of unrealistic elements thrown at us.

The characters seem to wield incredibly complex abilities with no prior training.

For example, Emmet can restructure molecular matter, an important and extremely dangerous ability, effortlessly. It's implausible that a person with no prior training (at least, none that we know of) is able to carry out such a feat.

Same goes with Jordan and Aly's abilities. We're given a single training scene and they seem to already master their powers.

Then, there is Professor Silas. He needs the children to fight for him, yet, he's provided no training whatsoever, which is unlikely of his character.

This implausibility risks breaking the immersion and narration flow.

You may either include more scenes of failed attempts before eventual mastery, or hint at the characters receiving rigorous training from the facility beforehand.

Lastly, the issue of unrestricted powers.

The children clearly hold resentment against the facility, yet their extreme powers are not restricted, when it could in fact spark a rebellion. This undermines Professor Silas' credibility as a cunning, prepared antagonist.