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✦ { Yasmin } The Fate That Binds Us

Customer: Dandan0_3

Reviewer: Owls1221

Title: 5/10

It's an interesting title. However, to be honest and polite, it's not that interesting because it's a bit vague and overdone. Additionally, it gives the idea that it might be a Romantasy since most Romantasy stories use similar titles.

Try to add a title that makes your story unique or more interesting at least. You could do that by using the protagonist's name, or the name of the world, or most interestingly, the name of a key event or something that is crucial in your story.

The reason you have to make the title interesting is so you can catch the readers' attention. Otherwise, your story is going to be lost in the sea of stories with very similar titles. Now of course, you don't have to be a perfectionist and make the most original title you can come up with. All you have to do is make the readers curious and ask questions about your book (good questions that is).

For example, when you read Suzanne Collins's "The Hunger Games", it makes you curious and ask something like "Hunger Games? what's that?" and when you read the synopsis, it piques your interest even more. Or James Dashner's "Maze Runner" where it makes you ask what it is about? Is it about someone running in a maze? Or someone who runs a maze?

Your title doesn't have to always be a made-up name. It could be an interesting phrase or a simple word even. Take Richard Osman's "The Thursday Murder Club" and "The Man Who Died Twice". The first book takes an ordinary word like 'club' and adds an interesting twist to it like 'Murder'. So it grabs your attention and makes you curious about it. We've heard of clubs, sure, but a Murder Club? That's interesting. And we humans only live once and die once, but to die twice? How could that be possible?

That's how you could write interesting titles for your story.

Don't worry about coming up with a title right away. The idea will come to you eventually. I struggle with coming up with titles myself :)

Cover: 8/10

Personally, I like simple covers. Yet the only thing I would advise is to move the title up (put it in the blue space) and make it big enough to fit it. And it's probably Wattpad's fault for how cropped the image is but just in case, try to enlarge your name and move it up just a little further so it's clear.

Summary: 9/10

You've written an interesting summary. It was simple, piqued my interest, and didn't give away too much of the plot. Although, I don't think it's an error but more of a suggestion with how you could use the punctuation. but that'll be explained in the next section of this review.

Grammar, Spelling, and Punctuation: 9/10

The grammar is all fine and consistent. Although there is an error in the second paragraph of your summary. Where the comma isn't needed when you add the word 'until'. Like this:

X incorrect X:

That is, until Rentarou, King of the Iron, enters her life and threatens the existence of her kingdom.

O correct O:

That is until Rentarou, the King of Iron, enters her life and threatens the existence of her kingdom.