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For Love by MentalDistortion [Review- Lovelorn Sighs]

Title: For Love

Author: MentalDistortion

Genre(s): Romance

Rating: PG-13

Blurb: This is the story of a boy (Jayden) who is kidnapped by an adult (Alyxx) for nothing more than sex, but what they both discover in each other is more than either of them ever dreamed would happen.

Review:

First off: I love your cast and title! Nice introduction on your first chapter-- intro sentences are important to catch the reader's eye. I like the descriptions in the first couple of paragraphs, the structure is very toned. Alyxx didn't come off as 'creepy' or 'crazed' as I thought he would, after reading your blurb. In fact, he seemed quite normal. And then.. I got to the part where he randomly asks Jayden to come over. And he agrees! What is this world coming to! xD But, anyway, it moves the story along. Oh jesus, you just made me cringe for Jayden! 

What I seriously loved about this was that there was none of that 'first chapter awkwardness', as there are in most stories. It didn't slow or lag down in any places. It was flowing very well, and reading it made me feel like Alyxx and I were one. You never stumbled, or came out awkward writing in his point of view. I love that you never tried to sugarcoat things, such as Alyxx crushing two sleeping pills into Jayden's drink. People usually skip it, and I'm left wondering, 'how did he end up unconcious?' Though, I felt the description kind of lacking the details behind Alyxx's evolution from being a completely normal guy to a sexual [dare I say it?] offender (is that the word for it, hope I didn't offend you). Sometimes, the emotional descriptions came off monotonous, and numb. It might have been done on purpose, who knows. 

But other than that, great story! I'll try getting to reading the rest of it :) 

P.S.- Ending is kind of abrupt, the nice flow of the story suddenly stopped. And I was left hanging. Oh well: it makes me want to read the next chapter!

Rating: 8.5/10

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~Lilly/ LovelornSighs