Judge Me Not

Remember Me [totallyinsane]

Title Remember Me (link in external box)

Author TheEnglishSponge (link at bottom of review)

Genre Romance/Non-Teen Fiction

Rating PG-13

Review

Your blurb is -honestly- one of the best hooker blurbs I've read on wattpad and already I want to read more. As well as this it is unusual. A lot of stories (the majority) on wattpad are based on teenagers and yours isn't and this will attract alot of readers.

Your description is wonderful and the story flows with no hinderances at all. Spelling mistakes a few and hardly any grammar.

The story itself is very interesting and unique. Alexandra's character has depth already in the first few pages and you can already form an opinion on most people mentioned. You write well in first person, not messing up any of the tenses or giving any 'grammar nazi' a reason to worry.

You keep the language simple which makes it more effective and I love how you put tension and conflict in almost straight away, giving your story an edge and scatterings of humour.

You keep in time with real life events and make the reader feel as if they are with the character and not just reading about her. 

Your first chapter is extremely well written and starts of the story nicely. It is a good length and will certainly not scare anyone off. You may however want to include just a small cliffhanger so they are left wanting more and not just with the thoughts that this is a really good book. 

Ok, your description is just amazing . It really makes the reader feel there (as mentioned before xD)  and gives a feeling of realism and not something that you're just making up. 

Again you have scatterins of humour that add to the book and the general atmosphere and fit the genre of non-teen fiction. The humour is quite dry but still funny.

The second chapter is not the most interesting but again you give more depth to Alex and make her even more realistic. (you seeing a reoccuring theme here? :P) You mention 'stroked the cat absent-mindedly' several times which makes it repetitive so try using a different describing word each time to give it some variety. 

No mistakes that I sure, grammar or spelling so well done!

Chapter three starts well but here you have missed a few letters to make is the right tense and some of your grammar needs correcting, also you repeat a few words more times than necessary. Again, add some variation!

Other than that I love the third chapter. You have -again- amazing description and -again- make the read feel as if they are next to Alex or even watching from her eyes.

Introducing the man in a way that almost makes it seem as if he will have no part in the rest of the story is a technique that you have used well and I love how you contradict it at the end by asking that question. That is also a great small cliffhanger. Chapter three is probably my favourite so far.

Chapter four is good, but again a few grammar and spelling mistakes. Though I can understand thatt his may be due to the fact that you edited the first two chapters- just noticed that xD

I like how you keep reminding us that there is Matthew who likes Alex and even though ALex wants to find out more about the man she bumped into in the coffee shop Matthew has been there longer. A bit of conflict is probably going to happen at some point?

You were concise and to the point in Chapter 4 but kept enough details to keep the reader interested and involved in the story. I love the ending telling us that it's the weekend and probably something is going to happen because she has free time.

Again I really like the fact your story is based on older people because it adds some difference to it and makes it seem more realistic.

Overall I really enjoyed this story and would gladly buy it if it was on sale!

Rating 9.7 -just for the grammar and spelling mistakes!

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