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Petal by LottieLupinx [Review- LovelornSighs]

Title: Petal

Author: LottieLupinx

Genre(s): Fantasy, Romance

Rating: PG

Blurb: Enter the world of Petals and Lilies, all supposedly guardians - Working together to protect humans from... well usually themselves... But something is stirring among the Lilies and their petals are noticing it to.. could someone be betraying them all?

Review: 

'Petal'-- I like the title :) 

Though your plot line and summary caught my attention, your grammar really made me groan. I'm sorry, but you need to review this prologue. Where commas should be, they were not. Where there should be a period, there were none. And please, please remember capitals at the beginning of each sentence. Also, make sure that the paragraphs are neatly organized and separate the dialogues from the paragraphs if they do not apply to the dialogue. Capitals on the character names please. 

I also could not seem to get the point of the prologue. What was this all about? Prologues are used to point out the plot and point of the story subtly, and I couldn't seem to decipher this one at all. I feel like this story has a lot of potential, if you'd just review your work before publishing, or get an editor. Overall, a bit disappointing on the execution but good idea. Nice effort, keep trying!

Rating: 5.5/10

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