Judge Me Not

The Secret Locket by AquaBubblez(Reviewed by JanBear_04)

Title- The Secret Locket

Author- AquaBubblez

Genre- Romance & Historical-Fiction

Rating- PG

Synopsis- After eighteen years of believing he was the legitimate son of an affectionate couple, his belief was shattered upon being told that he was the missing heir to a prestigious dukedom. 

Leaving his home and all that he loved and cherished behind, he began his new life as Marquess Of Livingston, attending high society parties, becoming the richest, most wanted bachelor in all of London and enjoying every moment of it. 

Until one day. One very fateful day all that he loved-he hated, all that he believed in-were illusions. And it all started with a locket. One locket that possessed dark secrets that would shock the ton, if it were ever to be found out. 

Would he risk his life to conceal the secret that held the answer to his past? Or would he dishonour his family’s name in order to find out who he is? 

It's a fight against fate but there's no chance of him winning this game. After all, fate can’t be tamed… 

Or can it?

Review-

 To begin, I think you have a really nice story in your hands at the moment. The way you began, in the first chapter with the little note to your readers where you tell us a bit about the message I thought was a very nice touch. I like your message and I don't usually read stories of that nature that show us one falling in love with the wrong woman/man for their exterior. Also I liked how you questioned the readers and involved them while bringing them in with a curiosity to read more. Oh and I really like your plot line. It's seems original and I like where it's headed. It's quite interesting. 

Now onto your chapters; I read three chapters because I couldn't get enough of your work. I'll definitely be going back and reading more. Nonetheless I thought you did a fantastic job. From the beginning with your prologue I liked how you started of with him committing a murder but you left us wondering why he did, which is a question that still stands while I was reading. You bring your characters in and I believe, have them hook with your starting. Your descriptions are amazing from the first to I'm sure to the seventh chapter. They have me vividly picturing the setting and features of your characters. You seem to thoroughly introduce your character which I enjoy and show a different side of each of them which leave us with many definitions of the protagonist. 

Another thing which I enjoyed in your chapters would likely be the way you provide your readers with keen insights of your characters thoughts. Your characters also seem to be quite relate able. And not only with the dialogue do you show their feelings but you include detail of things that cause them to fall apart or be filled with happiness. Each character is someone different and you show that exceptionally. Your dialogue is very realistic and I love reading that. They speak in a voice of sophistication but also you add a modern twist.

You have an amazing talent for writing and I really hope you continue your story until the end! It's phenomenal the way you write and there's nothing more I can tell you except break off your paragraphs a bit more so they don't overwhelm your readers. Other than that everything was wonderful and it couldn't be better!

Rating- 9/10

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By- JanBear_04/Janaka

*If anyone would like to read this story, it will be in my library (Reviewed Books) or the WattiesUnited library!