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The Alpha Nerd by thugsneedhugs (Review: Pinkypromise99)

Author: thugsneedhugs

Title: The Alpha Nerd

Genre: Werewolf, Romance

Rating: PG-13

Summary: You know all those cliché werewolf stories. The ones where the shy nerd is the mate of the future alpha. Who is also the biggest player in school. Yeah well that is my life in reverse. I am a nerd and future alpha of my pack. My mate is the biggest sl*t in school. Now she has to try to win my trust and heart. Trust me it isn't going to be easy.

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The Review:

To start of, I like how this is the EXACT opposite of a cliched story. Instead of the classic hot guy meets shy girl who turns out to be a werewolf story its like...backwards! I love it, so 10 billion imaginary points for creativity! 

Okay, so now on to the story. I read the story on my phone, originally and then again on-line so I was able to notice some differences. The main thing being the gap in between paragraphs. I'm not trying to change your writing style, i'd never want to do that, but maybe condensing the length you have in between paragraphs might be a good thing. Reading with that many lenghs in between could end up straining a reader- mainly as they're reading! You're eyes can't take it!

Other than that the only thing that I saw that needed some looking over was grammar and punctuation. BUT DON't FRET! Everyone has that problem. Fortunately, Wattpad has a problem for that! editorsUNITE is a big group on wattpad that focus's on editing your work so you can focus on writing, maybe you can check them out!

So enough of what needs changing, now, here are some great parts that I totally loved about your story! :) First of all, I was hooked from the dream the main character! I was soo worried that's something bad would happen to him, straight from the first chapter, so I was so glad when it was just a dream! I also love Sage. Honestly. A part of me is hoping that if things don't work out with Zach and his mate, he would go with Sage! Though, I really want to see how you will exploit Zach and his chosen mate's relationship and how they evolve to either love or hate each other. I'm also loving your own personal twist on the werewolf myths. 

So all in all, the great storyline you've got can totally take you're story to the top! Just work on fixing your weak spots when it comes to writing, mainly just the grammar and punctuation stuff. Other than that, I think you've got a great story and you should, KEEP WORKING ON IT!!

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My rating: 6.5 out of 10!

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Personal Note: Please, don't take any offence to anything I wrote. I don't mean to sound offensive or condescending, so If i did, forgive me! Plus- i'm really sorry for being late hehe ^-^

~*~Reviwed by: Pinkypromise99~*~