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If only the heavens knew [totallyinsane]

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Title- If only the heavens knew

Genre- Romance/Historical Fiction

Rating- PG

Author- moni8que

Review

So far to me the title doesn't seem to fit the story but it is a good and interesting title and I can kind of get where you are coming from with it!

The blurb/synopis is long but interesting and reveals enough to tell us the basis of the story and to also capture people's attention. You have (really) three main categories for blurb's; short and snappy, long and tedious or long and 'aware'. Your synopis falls into the latter.

This is because although it is long it is not in anyway tedious and is really not one of the longest blurbs on wattpad. It jumps so that you do not give away to much and also gives us a feel for what the story will be like. I think you do it really well.

The clothes that you describe are victorian but you let down your research when you mention Victora. Most males would have male servants and not females even if they had grown up with them.

You describe it well and the mother figure you portray is familiar because most mother figures in victorian settings are hasty, whiny, bossy and careful to impress.

The story has very subtle hints at humour which make it all the more better!

Your descriptive use is good but you seem to skip some parts of the story that may be important (the other girls) as well as that I don't know how the story is going to progress but I feel as if already in the first chapter you have given away who Stephan will choose.

I don't know if this is intentional and is infact leading a false trail for the readers of just my veiw on it  or maybe I am right!?

Again the way you portray the behaviour of some of the females is not very realistic to the Victorian times.

The end of the chapter is slightly amusing but alos arupt and I can't figure out if the cliffhanger works or doesn't!

Summary

It's great. Very well written and descriptive but you need to research a bit if you are serious about getting it out into the world. I really enjoyed it and it is the kind of book that would attract a wide range of audience and not just a section.

Rating

8.3  - nice just watch your step with the realism and pace! Keep it up :P

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-totallyinsane/Thing 2