Luna Brown - Ignored, Forgotten [totallyinsane]

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Title- Luna Brown- Ignored, Forgotten

Author- EllieTyler562

Genre- Teen Fiction/Humour

Rating- G

Review

(loving the picture for your cover! XD)

Your blurb is short and good but a small spelling mistake with 'there', should be 'they're'!

The prologue is intruiging and interesting and makes the reader ask a couple of questions. It is also sad yet heart-warming; very sincere and realistic. It is also sweet :)

The start of the chapter is interesting with a couple of spelling mistakes but also answers a few of the questions originally wanting to be asked in the prologue.

It is a bit cliche with the groups but you manage to add a bit of humour in with Sophia's crushes.

The introduction to the fire is a bit rushed and you could make it a bit more tense and descriptive but when you get to Sophia you become descriptive and it is sweet again.

The ending leaves a good cliffhanger, making the reader want to read on and know more.

Rating

4.5 - you could be a bit more descriptive and the plot isn't very certain yet, although that can almost certainly be put down to only being two parts so far!

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