Judge Me Not

Model Behaviour by Cassinthe80s(Reviewed by JanBear_04)

Title- Model Behaviour

Author- Cassinthe80s

Genre- Teen-Fiction & Humour

Rating- PG-13

Snyopsis- Ava Thompson’s life is very quickly going down hill. After a massive down fall from her modeling job she lands herself where every girl dreads; high school. The last time Ava was at school was in eighth grade where she was an awkward, gawky kid with thick glasses and monster tall. Ava leads herself up to be miss popularity (she is a famous after all), only to find herself stuck at possibly the nerdiest school possible. Nerds and smarts rule the school, with a seriously awful fashion sense and where being the coolest is judged off test grades. Ava being good at grades is like, impossible to the extreme so she lands herself at the bottom of the food chain.

So much for being popular.

Review-

 Okay, well I have to say after reading the first chapter of Model Behaviour, I completely had a nice, roaring laugh. I thought it was a great beginning and so do all your readers! You're an exeptional writer, something I think a lot of people would agree with. You have a great way of conveying your protagonist's thoughts and describing them in a way that isn't too much for your readers to handle. 3 pages for a beginning can some times be a bit too much but you did a great job writing it. The way you introduced the main characters were very nicely done and I think we learned a lot about Ava. We definitely had much insight to her thoughts and feelings about her mother's actions which I thought was quite interesting. They seem to have more of what seems like a friendly relationship than a mother, daughter one.

 Another thing I very much enjoyed was the humour you provided us with. The references you made to Kim Kardasian killed me and the man with the 3 cats, man living with his mother. Hilarious! Your sentence structures and descriptions were very nice but I thought you lacked a bit in detailing things. For instance, you could've maybe described the wedding dress store, or the changing rooms, etc. Just a suggestion. Also, your dialogue seemed to be quite realistic and it definitely showed us more of Ava's character. It was quite nice and I think you did a fantastic job. Just a few small errors especially in your last, large paragraph. For example you put," With her super model body and face so she doesn't look like." and "I don't look mom at all." It's nothing a quick skim couldn't fix. The first chapter was very wonderfully written and I hope you continue!

Rating- 8/10

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By- JanBear_04/Janaka

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