Judge Me Not

Destination Unknown by Poetic_Justice98 [Review- LovelornSighs]

Title: Destination Unknown

Author: Poetic_Justice98

Genre(s): Romance, Other

Rating: PG-13

Blurb: An abused child runs away from home with nothing but a tooth brush, some clothes, her mothers locket, and twenty dollars. 

Justice Elizabeth Monroe

Age: 16

Hair: Blonde

Eyes: Green

Justice was never the kind of girl to depend on others but when push comes to shove she might have to. After meeting Isaiah

( Blade ) in a street fight not only does Justice find something unexpected but she finds raw talent.

Review:

First off, love that you used a quote in the prologue. It kind of set the mood for the rest of your prologue. 'I watched as the love of my life walked out of my life for good. Taking half of my heart with him.' A good sentence, but you're missing an 'of' between out and my. And connect the two sentences, use a comma or semi colon. It looks awkward with them being separated. Also, you don't need spaces between the actual dialogue and the quotation marks. 'Person after person boarded the train..' Person after person sounds strange on the tongue. Maybe change it to a 'One after another, people boarded the train..' And finally, the last sentence: 'Be strong Justice be strong' You're missing commas! [Sorry, commas are my pet peeve! I'm in love with them-- I can't live without commas!] 

Overall, a very good start. Though, I feel like this was a little short and it's unclear what the point of this prologue was. You mentioned something about her 'situation' and running away and the love of her life. It's all kind of a jumbled mess right now. But maybe that was your intention. I liked the small descriptions, though I felt you could have delved into a little more detail. Don't worry, other than minor punctuation errors, it was good! :)

Keep writing!

Rating: 8/10

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