Judge Me Not

Cutting Through the Silence by LovelornSighs(Reviewed By JanBear_04)

Title- Cutting Through The Silence

Author- LovelornSighs

Genre- Fantasy & Adventure

Rating- PG

Synopsis- Sadie Hazelwood lives in a world where everyone has the ability to know everyone’s biography. When they were born, where they lived, every single secret. She lives in the land of Yutivia, where everyone is born equal– all of them born with an aura. Except, the King couldn’t have everyone running around rampant, wielding their powers and killing everyone off. 

So, he created an annual test for teenagers 14 years of age and above. You pass the test, you enter Valefor Academy– the most prestigious academy where you can learn to harness your powers. And if you don’t, your powers are sealed till the next test. But right after the test, all memories of it will be erased. Why? No one knows. 

Sadie is just one of the hundreds that got into Valefor Academy this year. She’s just another average student, except on the first day of school, a rebel breaks into Valefor and launches an aura orb right into– Sadie. And really, she should be dead from the attack. But her body instead absorbed all the power, and now she’s known as the most powerful and most importantly, the most dangerous student in the school. 

But no one has ever been able to break into Valefor before, let alone get past the barrier that surrounds it. So, is this rebel really that powerful? Or was he let in intentionally?

Review-

Well, to start off I would like to compliment you on your wonderful ideas. Not only is this story line quite original it is also very interesting. Reading your synopsis I didn't really know what I was going to be reading, like the format and such but you write quite extraordinary. I was surprised after reading the prologue and the first chapter that you haven't receive more than 10 votes and comments for each post. 

To talk about your writing, you have talent. That isn't hidden in your work, it's clear and shown through as your write. To begin with your prologue I think you did a wonderful job of capturing the readers attention. You didn't begin with the acceptance of Sadie into Valefor Academy like I thought you would but started off with how she had gotten hit with an aura orb. You wrote in a simplistic format which I admired for the prologue that had me wanting more. I'm very picky when I read stories because I like specific things included- proper grammar, punctuation, grammar; included detail and description. You involved all of those things and you made me love the beginning of your story.

Now onto the first chapter, that was wonderful as well. You created very realistic dialogue for your characters and described them in a way that would introduce their personality subtly. I think you brought your protagonist, Sadie Hazelwood to life, and gave us an image of how her character may be. You gave detail in a way that wasn't too much and told us much about the different "sortings" in a way that wouldn't bore us. I think you're doing an amazing job so far but all I think you really need to do is keep promoting! There's nothing else that I can give you, there's no errors that I found but PROMOTE! It will definitely get you very far! Overall I think you're doing a better than great job! I hope you definitely continue Cutting Through the Silence because I'll definitely be reading MUCH more!!

Rating- 9/10

I don't think you need to be informed about the whole interview thing because you're part of WattiesUnited so I'll leave it at that!

By- JanBear_04/Janaka

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