Judge Me Not

The Tale of Prince Charming by storywriterlf97 (Reviewed by Lilshrimp)

Title: The Tale of Prince Charming

Author:StoryWriterlf97

Rating: None

Genre:Fantasy, Short story

Summary: Josh Carter thinks so high of himself in his society.. He is the beautiful prince, who couldn't love him? When Josh realizes his princess is not the beautiful girl she appears to be he can't help but wonder why. Then she gets kidnapped. He must find her after all she is suppsoed to be his true love. but is she really? And can he really get he to love him when she is already in love with the commoner Blake?

Review:     The Tale of Prince Charming is short. It's two parts, and weaves a tale of love, and ultimately the sacrifices we make for love. It's a cute short story, that has potential.

     My advice to make it better, is to add detail. Let your reader see what you see when you are writing. I really can't picture Julie, Blake, or Josh. Some of the best writers take a simple sentence and add details to make it more descriptive so the reader has a mental image. For instance instead of I sat at an oak tree, you could make it: As I sat by the old oak tree, with the wind whipping through my hair I reminsced on the times we had had in this park, and the ones meant to come. See the difference? Same with characters. Don't be so obvious about details, weave them into your sentences. It will make you a better writer and the story more captivating.

     The story has potential, it is of course a total cliche, but nonetheless it is good for being a cliche. Fix it up, and it will be so much better.

Rating: 6/10 for lacking details. Other than that it was good.

The Tale of Prince Charming was reviewed by Tara/ @lilshrimp

*This story will be in our library if you want to read it!