Judge Me Not

Rejected (rainbowofponies)

This story has now been taken down from Wattpad but the author continues to write other stories and they are still available on their profile.

Title: Rejected

Author: Ambers_Ashes

Rating: PG- 13

Genre: Werewolves, Romance

Blurb: When I was nine when my parents were killed in front of me by Hunters. And ever since then I've been hated by the Pack. They said that I caused it. That it should have been me. And ever since it started I've been wishing for my mate. So that he can at least stand up for me and love me. But what I didn't expect was for him to tear out my heart and stop on it. Meet Damon Hale. He would meet his mate on his fourteenth birthday. His mate is me. Josephine Redford. I thought he would love and cherish me but boy, was I wrong. He rejected me in front of the whole Pack, saying that he could never love and ugly, fat bitch like me. I was crushed but didn't give up. Then, one day, when I came home from school I decided to make their lives less miserable and leave. So that very night I packed my stuff and left. I don't know how far I got but I did end up on the Blue Blood Pack's territory. There I meet four awesome, loving people who I am now proud to call my brothers. When the Midnight Pack is forced into moving in with us my life turns from happy normal to crazy hectic. Will I survive their hateful comments or will I break and run again?

Review:

The start was interesting, with how everything began for the main character, but there's some spelling mistakes and missing punctuations. The plot moves too fast at the beginning, but then it settled and moved into a more steady pace. Perhaps the fast-foward didn't quite worked out for me, because it opened rather in the middle of something.

I liked the family bonding of the pack Joey is in, and that they treated her like a sister and is protective towards her. It's realistic enough that she doesn't immediately forgive her former one, yet she couldn't hate them for it. I'm interested on your mythology (Omega, Alpha, Beta) and I would love to find out soon what they meant.

You only posted a few chapters, so I couldn't review any more than beyond right now. But your story has a good potential! For werewolf fanatics!

xx Coleen/rainbowofponies ;)