Type Of Story: 1D
Author: DIS0BEYSTYLES
Story Rating: Not Rated
Reads: 314
Votes: 39
Comments: 4
Description:
Louis Tomlinson (18) really want to go to a college in Ireland. He wants to live there since he has the passions to study in there.
He will have triangle love with two other guys, one is a good guy and one is a bad guy. So who will get chosen by louis? Is it Zayn or is it Harry?
Ⓒ 2014, Tira (DIS0BEYSTYLES), All rights reserved
Suggested If: you ship Larry and/or Nouis
My Review: The plot jumps around a lot and is extremely hard to follow. It seems to go by extremely fast as well. It leaves me very confused to be completely honest. Your chapter lengths are okay, but your grammar and spelling needs a LOT of work, ESPECIALLY your grammar. Which leads to my question-is your first language English? I'm asking because some of the words you type (like "gotten") are typical mistakes of non-native speakers. Overall, this story could use a lot of work.
Note to Author: Edit!
Rating (1-5): 1.5
Other Notes: Slow down the plot!
