Type Of Story: 1D Fanfic
Author: ilovenialler0001
Story Rating: PG-13
Description:
Carissa, a normal school girl, acts as if she hates Niall Horan, the school bad boy, player, the guy your mom and dad say to stay away from, BUT in fact she likes him, like every girl in school. They hang out a little, talk a little, feelings are unleashed, events take place and secrets spill. They know more about each other then ANYONE else does. Well almost everyone. They can read each other, almost, like an open book. Everything was perfect, too perfect. She believed she knew everything about Niall. And before you know it, she learns that she didn't know everything about Niall. Nothing close. Lies are told, more secrets are revealed. danger strikes, and people change. That how life goes. Right? According to Carissa, no its not.
A.N:Please keep in mind this is my first fan-fiction, so please no hate only constructive criticism. feed back is wanted! :))
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~Carissa
Suggested If: You like drama with abusive families, drug dealing, that sorta thing
My Review: Honestly, I wasn't a fan of this fanfic. The overall grammar/spelling was okay, minus a few errors here and there, which I appreciate, but I wasn't a big fan of the plot. It was rushed and I felt like it was sort of cliché, with the whole everybody coming from horrible, abusive backgrounds and all that. I know there are people like that in real life, but not everybody comes from abusive backgrounds and everybody in this story, except for Carissa's friend Jalena, came from exactly that.
Note To Author: I know this was your first fanfic, so don't feel too discouraged. My first fanfic sucked too and was the exact definition of cliché and carroty, I swear xD I saw in one of your author's notes that you were considering a rewrite, and I think you should go through with that idea. Slow down the plot, don't make everybody and everything the exact same, that sorta thing (:
Rating (1-5): 2.3
Other Notes: Once again, I know this was the first fanfic you've ever written, so you definitely have potential of getting better! My rating may be a bit low, but it is just my opinion and I know other people may enjoy the story more than I did. And who knows! Maybe a revision could bring a 2.3 up to a 4 or 5 (;
