Type Of Story: 1D Fanfic
Author: TaylorGaal
Story Rating: PG-13
Reads: 820
Votes: 65
Comments: 10
Description:
It's in the Wattpad chapters
Suggested If: You like love triangles (Jordan/Niall/Zayn) but with...complications
My Review: At first I thought it was another carrot fic and I was like "oh God," but you threw in a major plot twist with the whole "game" thing. I would've liked for the game to drag on for a few more chapters, but whatever. I like the varying chapter lengths and your spelling/grammar seems fairly decent, though there are some things that definitely need work. I'd say your biggest problems are the mix up of your/you're and there/their/they're (mostly your/you're though) and also, dialogue.
Note To Author: When it comes to the dialogue, you're pretty good except you keep adding a comma outside of the quotation marks when you don't need to. When you're writing dialogue, the ending quotation marks should look like one of the following: ," ." ?" !" NOT .", and etcetera. Also, you need to create new paragraphs whenever a new character is speaking.
Rating (1-5): 3
Other Notes: You should try to finish the story.
