Type Of Story: 1D Fanfic
Author: JonesR_luvs_1D
Story Rating: PG-13
Reads: 4,074
Votes: 103
Comments: 13
Description:
Anna was a normal girl when Harry asks her out. They start to go out and on one of their dates something happens... Anna gets pregnant. Then Harry's friends come and visit. How will Anna and Harry cope with all this stress.
P.S. The begining, isn't the best. Please just read through it and I promise that the story gets better as it goes on.
Suggested If: you like fanfics thare are family based as well as romantically based
My Review: the plotline is pretty cliche and your spelling and grammar need a little work. I understand that it's your first story so it's definitely not going to be the best. I really like the different chapter lengths and I like how far you've come with the story so you should definitely try to complete it! The way I see it, there are two problems with this story (plot wise, besides it being cliche):
1. The beginning. I completely agree with your note in the summary, the beginning is not the best. It's uber long and drags on a lot. Honestly, I almost had to stop before I even got to chapter five because the beginning really dragged on. However, it did get a lot better once I was able to push past all that.
2. The fact that the moms just let their kids have sex at 16/18, plus they weren't even fazed by Anna getting pregnant. I can tell you right now that if it were real life, most families wouldve kicked their children out. Either that or they wouldn't have supported or helped the couple at all. Trust me, I know. My dad had a kid when he was 21 and the woman (who isn't my mom btw) was 18. And then his kid (my half brother) had a kid when he and the chic were both 18 (they're 20 now). They weren't kicked out, but my dad and grandparents sure as hell werent all peaches and cream about it like the parents in this story were.
Note To Author: Because you're already so far into the story, I wouldn't do a rewrite. I'd just edit some things (:
Rating (1-5): 2.5
Other Notes: Try your best to finish through with the story and keep the things I said in mind (:
Thank you for your follow! (:
