Type Of Story: 1D
Author: couldyounot-
Story Rating: PG-13
Reads: 58,300
Votes: 2,306
Comments: 1,191
Description:
*HOLIDAY 2014 BROMANCE AWARDS ROUND 1*
Liam's a teenager- except he suffers from a crippling disorder that makes him act like a toddler. His older brother Louis has to take care of him; protect him from the harshness of the world, like from their deadbeat mother, and his bullies at their school. But one of them saw the error of his ways and tries to make amends with the two, which leads them all on a emotional journey they'll never forget.
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Suggested If: you ship Larry (as a romance)
My Review: (I HAD THE ENTIRE REVIEW TYPED OUT AND THEN THE STUPID WEBSITE RELOADED, FML)
ANYWAY, let's try this again...maybe.
I don't ship Larry in any way, shape, or form, but I LOVE the plot. Liam is adorable, I like how you didn't make Eleanor a complete bitch, and I LOVE Liam's relationships with everybody. The varying chapter lengths are really good and I like the overall length of the fanfic-it's not too long, but not too short. Your spelling and grammar definitely isn't the best in the world, but it's still pretty good. I'd say your biggest mistake is dialogue spacing-you need to create new paragraphs whenever a different character is speaking, otherwise the chapters look kinda choppy and it's hard to tell who's talking. Besides that though and just a few mixups of words that sound the same (like there/their), your grammar is pretty good. Overall...do I actually like a Larry fic? o.O
Note to Author: Congrats on writing the first (and possibly only) Larry fanfic I'll ever like! Holy shit, I thought this day would never come xD
Rating (1-5): 4.5
Other Notes: I'M STILL NOT OVER ED
(side note: sorry this took FOREVER to get out. Sometimes I hate real life)
