Fanfic Review: Angels Aren't Real (Ziall)

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Type Of Story: 1D Fanfic

Author: Eleasah_Horan

Story Rating: PG-13 (it should be R because of the sex scene)

Reads: 1,239

Votes: 98

Comments: 73

Description: His innocent exterior was the best disguise for the devils bidding. What happens when he is given a task to kill a stranger to prove he is worthy? What if he falls in love? Impossible he is a heartless killer... So he thought (BoyxBoy)

Suggested If: You like supernatural type Ziall fics

My Review: I love the plot. Even though there aren't that many chapters yet, I think the plot is very easy to catch on to and very distinguished. Plus I just have a thing for both demonic type stories and Ziall so xD it might go just a liiiittle fast, but I don't think you need to worry about it too much (: your grammar and spelling is fairly decent, there are just a few things you need to work on. Mainly I think your biggest issues are dialogue-whenever a new character is speaking you ALWAYS want to remember to create a new paragraph-and sentence choppiness. Some sentences were just a little hard to read. Overall though I'd say it's a pretty decent (first?) fanfic

Note To Author: I'd continue (:

Rating (1-5): 3

Other Notes: A friend of the author asked me to review this so if the author herself wants me to take this down I will (:

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