Type Of Story: 1D/JB Fanfic
Author: jbiebfan
Story Rating: G
Reads: 8,613
Votes: 168
Comments: 35
Description:
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Suggested If: You like vampire fics
My Review: The plot is extremely cliche with the whole "Vampire Direction" thing. I'm not sure if this your first fanfic, but whether it is or not I think you need to work on story ideas. The plotline goes by really really fast too. Your spelling is okay for the most part and I like the varying chapter lengths, but your grammar needs a lot of work-though your biggest issues are by far dialogue (separating paragraphs when a different character is speaking, putting punctuation marks on the inside of the ending quotation mark, etc.) and sentence choppiness.
Note To Author: I would either edit the plot or keep going with this, but think of a different plot for another story.
Rating (1-5): 1.5
Other Notes: I would go back and edit your chapters!
