Fanfic Review: My overprotective dominant mates that moved next door

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Type Of Story: 1D/JB Fanfic

Author: jbiebfan

Story Rating: G

Reads: 8,613

Votes: 168

Comments: 35

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Suggested If: You like vampire fics

My Review: The plot is extremely cliche with the whole "Vampire Direction" thing. I'm not sure if this your first fanfic, but whether it is or not I think you need to work on story ideas. The plotline goes by really really fast too. Your spelling is okay for the most part and I like the varying chapter lengths, but your grammar needs a lot of work-though your biggest issues are by far dialogue (separating paragraphs when a different character is speaking, putting punctuation marks on the inside of the ending quotation mark, etc.) and sentence choppiness.

Note To Author: I would either edit the plot or keep going with this, but think of a different plot for another story.

Rating (1-5): 1.5

Other Notes: I would go back and edit your chapters!

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