Type Of Story: 1D
Author: OMG_Its_Dez
Story Rating: PG-13
Reads: 1.7K
Votes: 134
Comments: 140
Description:
21 year old Desiree Mitchell never had enough love. Ever. Not since her mom died anyway. But then Harry Styles and the rest of One Direction adopts her. Sounds bizarre but simple right? Well it's not. On top of romance, betrayal, heartbreak, and tears, The Wanted also is fighting for Desiree. They want to adopt her as much as One Direction. Read this to find out what happens!
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Cover credit to: Sweater_Paws_bishh
Suggested If: you like stories where the boys are famous
My Review: The plot was EXTREMELY cliche and honestly, unrealistic. Why the fuck would One Direction be adopting anyone, let alone a woman in her 20s? That makes literally no sense. So yes, the plot DEFINITELY needs a LOT of work. Your grammar and spelling is...okay...though it could definitely use some touching up on. And stop just listing stuff! Descriptions are much, much better. I like your chapter lengths and I LOVE the Taylor Swift references (#SwiftieForLife), but overall...this story definitely needs some (if not a lot) of work.
Note to Author: Even though this review was rough, I do understand that it was your first fanfic. Just try to work on a plot that is more original.
Rating (1-5): 1
Other Notes: IF you keep practicing, I think your fanfic(s) could improve a lot!
