Type Of Story: Pierce The Veil Fanfic
Author: XxvalanxX
Story Rating: PG-13
Reads: 1,648
Votes: 267
Comments: 315
Description:
Everybody has a friend, some just happen to have one on the other side of the world. That's the case for Tony. Being the outcast doesn't bother him, he has Melanie. He has got that one friend, who happens to live in Sweden. A promise of meeting when they've officially sent 100 letters will soon turn everything upside down .
Is she everything he expected ?
Is he everything he claimed to be ?
Will they remain friends ?
Will they last in real life ?
-XxvalanxX
Suggested If: You're a fan of Pierce The Veil
My Review: Well I don't really listen to Pierce The Veil (when it comes to rock and metal I prefer Avenged Sevenfold, Bullet For My Valentine, 3 Doors Down, Lifehouse, etc.) so it's kinda hard for me to get a feel for the characters, but that's not your fault at all (: but I really really like the plot. I think it's cute, but not so cute that its cliche...if that makes sense. I like your varying chapter lengths and when it comes to your spelling and grammar I'd give you a 50/50. It's not the best, but not the worst either and, in case you want to fix anything, here were some mistakes I noticed:
1) separating punctuation. For example, you want to write something with punctuation "like this!" NOT "like this !"
2) Comma placement. In some places there were too few commas and in other places there were too many. This is something that you just get better with practice so I'm not really sure what advice to give you, but you may be able to find some help on Google (:
3) Using apostrophes when you don't need to. For example, if it were a word like "lie," you would write the plural form of the word like "lies" NOT like "lie's."
There may be other things, but those were the major things that I noticed. Overall, it wasn't the best fanfic ever, but it was a nice read.
Note To Author: I'd continue it (:
Rating (1-5): Grammar/Spelling: 3 (average)
Plot: 4
Other Notes: I dunno if any of my readers are Pierce The Veil fans, but if you are I'd check this story out!
