Type Of Story: 1D Fanfic
Author: paulwaysblogging
Story Rating: PG-13
Reads: 23,589
Votes: 668
Comments: 100
Description:
So, you would think living with five boys would be easy, huh? Well, trust me. It's not. Especially when these boys are One Direction.
I should really introduce myself shouldn't I? Well, meet me. Emily Blue. I have to live with One Direction for two years! You may think it's a dream to live with the biggest boyband on the planet? Yes it is but, at the same time it's not.
And also, to make it even harder I have to go to college aswell. Studying and fame. Great combo! So, what happens? Join me on my crazy but, fun journey while I have to live with five boys.
A NIALL HORAN LOVE STORY.
Suggested If: You like fics where the boys are famous and there are already a lot of chapters.
My Review: Well I feel like the plot itself is extremely Carroty and cliche with the whole girl living with 1D thing, but I like the speed of the plot. Emily and Niall don't just make out within the first five chapters and you actually take time to let their relationship develop, though things did get a bit repetitive after awhile. Anyway, your grammar/spelling needs some work though it definitely isn't the worst in the world. I'd say your biggest issues are comma/apostrophe placement (this is one of those things that you get better at with practice so I'm not sure what tips I can give you, but I bet if you go onto Google you can find some help with the comma placement) though it does get a little better as the story goes on. And your second biggest issue is the mixup of 'ys' and 'ies' (for example if I made the word 'ability' plural you would write it like 'abilities' NOT 'abilitys). And then just like, check over typos and things. Lastly, I really like how you describe things-you're very good with describing things like rooms, people, etc.
Note To Author: Since you're so far into the story, I would try to finish it and keep the things I said above in mind.
Rating (1-5): I'm actually going to split the story into three ratings:
Plot: 1-1.5
Spelling/Grammar: 3.5
Describing Things/Descriptions: 4-4.5
Other Notes: I think if you took the time to come up with a more original plot, fix your spelling and grammar just a bit, and keep describing things as well as you do, you could make an amazing second fanfic!
