Type Of Story: 1D
Author: Niamqt
Story Rating: PG-13 (should be R because of the sex scenes)
Reads: 674
Votes: 30
Comments: 7
Description:
Zayn and Sam are just friends with benefits or is there more?
Suggested If: you like stories with the whole 'sex toy turned lover' plot going on
My Review: The plot is extremely cliche, but even though it SEEMS like it would go fast, I like the pace of the plot since Zayn and Sam have known each other for awhile. Your chapter lengths could be a little longer, but they're definitely not the worst chapter lengths I've seen. Your grammar and spelling could use a bit of work-with stuff like when to space a paragraph, spacing dialogue when a different character is speaking, your/you're, there/they're/their, that sort of thing. Overall, definitely not the greatest story in the world, but that's okay because it's just your first (:
Note to Author: DON'T FEEL DISCOURAGED BY THIS REVIEW. It's just your first fanfic, most people (if not everyone) get better with practice (:
Rating (1-5): 2
Other Notes: I'd go back and edit those chapters!
