Type Of Story: 1D Fanfic
Author: Hazz_BadBitxh
Story Rating: PG-13
Reads: 10,429
Votes: 731
Comments: 599
Description: There's a description, but it's in the Wattpad chapters aye
Suggested If: You like Harry fics with witches and warlocks (or fantasy stories in general)
My Review: I'm usually not one for fantasy stories with witches and warlocks and that sorta thing (you guessed it: I don't like Harry Potter), but I do think the plot is pretty unique and I like the speed of the plot as well. Things aren't too fast, but they aren't too slow either. I like all the varying chapter lengths too and your grammar definitely isn't the worst in the world, but a few things could definitely use some work:
1. Apostrophe Ses (these things: 's). You seem to mix up when to and when not to use them. You DO use them when you're describing one thing (ex: the game's cancelled). You do NOT use them when describing more than one thing (ex: the dogs are outside)
2. Dialogue. You're okay with this at times, but there are some areas that could use more work town others. Whenever a new character is speaking you want to create a NEW paragraph for dialogue.
3. Proper nouns. Whenever you're talking about a specific place or thing (ex: New York City, Pretty Little Liars), you want to capitalize the first letter of EVERY word that is a part of the place/thing.
4. Sometimes you would space out words that you don't need to (ex: you'd write 'some times' instead of 'sometimes')
So yeah, that may seem like a lot of things that need fixing, but they're all actually really simple fixes. Overall though, it wasn't the best fanfic ever, but it was pretty decent.
Note To Author: I'd continue!
Rating (1-5): 3
Other Notes: Sorry this took so long to get up!
