Type Of Story: 1D Fanfic
Author: ohbabyitsemmy
Story Rating: PG-13
Reads: 8,090
Votes: 154
Comments: 67
Description:
The Lost Song: Sheet music lost. If found, please return to 683 Derrin Street or call (077) 481-6221. Reward: $14
When Elle Somers' original song falls into the hands of One Direction...What will happen?
Why is the song so important for her to find?
Will she get her song back? (Note from Reviewer (Mwah): I'm not sure if that number is real or not...what if someone actually tries to call it and it is real? I would change it...maybe to a number that starts with 555? Those numbers are usually fake)
Suggested If: You like fics where the boys are famous
My Review: I like the overall plot. There are a few cliche moments (like the truth or dare game), but overall it's really good. Cute, simple, and I like how you made Elle come in contact with the boys instead of them just bumping into each other on the street. I really like your varying chapter lengths and your grammar and spelling is actually really good. I think your biggest issue is just the mixup of your and you're. Your shows possession (for example: is that YOUR cat?) and you're is saying that you literally are something (for example: wow, YOU'RE so pretty!) Overall though, it's pretty good and I'd continue it!
Note To Author: You should continue and try to finish it (:
Rating (1-5): 4
Other Notes: The one thing I'd try to fix besides your/you're is the chapter with the dream. Some of it, especially the beginning, was kind of confusing and I'm not sure if her mother really died or not?
