The One Who Stole From A Witch's Garden | Crystal_Winter_

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"Demons are like obedient dogs, they come, when they are called..." The witch stops with a wicked smile "And I was called just like the rest."

Magic. Everybody thinks that magic is... perfect, it's beautiful and wonderful and that it is just blinding, divine good. It's not. Anybody who lives... anywhere where magic is leaking like a tap that never turns off, knows that magic... Is one of the worst things on the planet. Magical beings exist, witches exist. But where a witch dwells, there also dwells pure, unadulterated evil of the Devil.

Nobody knows how they come and how they go, nobody knows what they look like and have lived to tell the tale, nobody ventures into the Forbidden Woods where the Wicked Witch of The East lives. Everybody knows that.

But Midnight was sick, and Jae-Ho had no choice but to steal from HIS garden.

He didn't think the consequences would go that far.

"Hate in return for love, great pain in return for great health, sorrows in return for eternal joy, death in return for a life, sacrifice in return for power. I do all this, just for you. So tell me dearest Jae-Ho, how am I cruel when I give you what you want?"

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