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BLURB:
Blue has been asleep for 25 years.
When he wakes up, he finds himself in a different world. One made of injustice and rebellion. A new world created from the war and hatred between humans and machines.
The worst part of it all? He's a machine.
Blue is uncovered by a girl named Red whose on a mission to find her parents that disappeared 12 years ago. The two must now venture into a war-ridden America together, with Blue doing his-all to protect Red.
Throughout their journey, Blue begins to feel things a robot shouldn't. Emotions forbidden for machines. Compassion, curiosity, and love.
He knows he shouldn't have fallen in love.
He knows it's not normal but what's so bad about the forbidden love of a robot?
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YOUR COVER: (10/10) I enjoyed the cover because it gave me a feel for what your story's about, and it draws in the right audience for your story. From the way the font is presented to the author's name on the bottom, it's professional and I can tell a lot of thought has been put into the cover. Well done here!
YOUR TITLE: (9/10) This title is appealing, carefully chosen, and expresses your story well. The only reason why I took off a point here is because I feel that I've seen many sci-fi stories that have "stars" in their title. If you choose to stick with this, make sure that it's really relevant to your story, and try to have an open mindset on any other title ideas that may pop into your head during the writing process.
YOUR BLURB: (3/5) I enjoyed the concise and organized blurb! It was well written, and I got the gist of your story. The only thing I suggest you could improve on here is to write out your numbers "twenty-five" and "twelve." There is a minority group of readers who feel that numbers that aren't written out show the laziness or unprofessional side of the author, so in order to keep all your readers happy, you might as well just avoid that problem altogether by writing them out. Along with that, I've noticed you've used an unnecessary hyphen "his-all" and you slipped up your tense. Your blurb is written in present tense, using words such as "is" and "finds." However, in the sentence "He knows he shouldn't have fallen in love," you switched into past tense. I suggest replacing "shouldn't have" with simply "shouldn't." You're also missing a few commas here and there, such as in the last sentence. The word "whose" should also be replaced with "who's" because you're saying Red is on a mission, not that it is her mission. I've also noticed throughout reading your story that Red is the protagonist here. I suggest rewriting your blurb to be in Red's perspective, because even if Blue is also a protagonist, Red's POV comes first for the first five chapters, and you don't want to give your readers something they didn't want (for example, readers who came looking for a story in a male's POV).
