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Selena Namori is a pyschopath, an incarcerated criminal with no family or friends. That's exactly what the Minerva program is looking for. A tenth planet has been discovered in the solar system, named Minerva X. It's unknown whether the planet is inhabitable, though there's a possibilty that it is. NASA has put together a team of five to find out, including a not-so-cold murderer, a caring volunteer, a failed genius, a hot-headed sociopath, and Selena. A psychotic, charasmatic felon with a violent track record. What will happen next, as they learn, train, live, and... die together?
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YOUR COVER: (8/10) I can clearly see that effort has been put into the cover. However, have you tried experimenting with the font type, color, and sizing? What about the layering and manipulation of photos? Your cover is definitely impressive as it is now, but a good alternative to think about is to contact a cover maker on Wattpad.
YOUR TITLE: (10/10) The connection between your story and your title is palpable, and it was an immediate lightbulb moment for me. While it might seem like an obvious choice and title, it also suits your story perfectly. Well done here, I'm impressed!
YOUR BLURB: (2/5) The first thing I noticed here is that you spelled psychopath, possibility, and charismatic wrong. Always proof-read your blurb and edit it before throwing it out there, since it's an open window for potential readers to see the capabilities you have in writing. Along with that, there were some unnecessary filler words and information. I had to read it slower than necessary to wrap my head around it, and I suggest that you separate this into several paragraphs to make it more understandable and easy to read. So, the principal ideas here are that Selena Namori is chosen to enter the Minerva Program along with four other people. The goal here is to see if the recently discovered planet, Minerva X, is habitable or not. Now, they have to learn to train, live, and die together (that last part of the blurb was pretty dang good, too). My take on your blurb would be:
Selena Namori is a psychopath, and an incarcerated criminal with no family or friends is exactly what the Minerva Program is looking for.
When a tenth planet known as Minerva X is discovered, a team of scientists from NASA bring together a team of five to discover whether it's habitable or not.
Selena, a charismatic felon with a violent track record, is grouped with a not-so-cold murderer, a caring volunteer, a failed genius, and a hot-headed sociopath. Joined together with the most unlikely of people, she's forced to learn how to train, live... and die together.
It's definitely not my best writing, but did you notice how I've separated your blurb into several paragraphs and restructured which sentence goes where? This doesn't mean you should copy and paste this, but try to use your own writing style and find your own guideline to follow when focusing on your blurb. It's one of the most important parts of your story, as it's often the selling point for readers, if they'll read it or not.
