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We got another oc here guys by someone I've had a couple of interactions with in the past when I went by Frosted_queen as my user. Here is the review for The_Real_Kyoka_Jiro
My comments will be in bold
Basics and grounding
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Ooooooh I really like the sound of this universe, I like how this is all tied together, it looks like all you have to do is add some final details.
Character information
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I like her personality a lot, she seems like a decent person. But I do have some notes: -be careful making your character 16, it is a very common age for characters but that isn't a big deal. -I don't have a problem with coloured hair as long as it's dyed and not naturally that colour. -I recommend giving her a hobby of two that is completely different to the rest, whilst I do like her hobbies and they're pretty unique, most people have a wider range of hobbies.
Relationships
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This part seems pretty realistic, all I can tell you to do here is to flesh out what you've already come up with and add more details.
Backstory
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I do like the sound of this story and it is probably something I would read. Just be careful though, because it would take a lot to push a sixteen year old to use drinking as a coping mechanism since it isn't as easy to get as being an adult (obviously). As someone who has a character that used to gave a drinking problem as a young age to deal with her parents death, I know how hard this can be to pull off. Apart from that, there seems to be pretty good reasoning behind everything here and all you need to do is flesh it out a bit more.
Other
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I like that she doesn't rely on her powers and that she doesn't have an insane range of abilities. If this was still a mha oc, I'm pretty sure it would be a good one, regarding quirks and abilities that is.
Stats
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t's refreshing to see a character that isn't incredibly brave, since there are normally less people willing to act then there are people will to. The stats overall are great!
Final thoughts This character is well balanced and interesting, if anything more positive traits could be added. The only real problem here is you need to sit down and flesh everything out and add more details. But, I really like the sound of this character so far! Well done!!
*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you of course do not have to listen to what I've said. This us all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*
