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Designed a new character but want to know others thoughts on it? Want to get some tips on how to make a good character or to be pointed in the right direction? Well, you're in the right place! I'm here to check your guys' OCS an...
Here we have another mha oc, and I genuinely enjoy reviewing characters for this series. KitKattHeartAttack
My comments will be in bold
Basics and grounding / character information
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Ahhhhhh I really like this character. The description of her personality is very vivid and well done. Her appearance fits into the universe but it isn't overdone which is great!! She has a wide range of hobbies and interests which is important in making a realistic character. Overall, she's a character I could definitely see later on in the series.
Relationships
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This is very well planned out and detailed. I feel like the friends and family work well and it seems realistic. I don't have anything else to say here because I can't really point out any points of improvement.
Backstory
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Woah, this is pretty original, obviously the whole 'being involved with villains in the past' thing is very common, but I don't think I've seen one like this before. The only thing I can say here is be careful with villains being after her, it's incredibly common and can make your character seem like she's 'wanted', which is often used to make the character seem more perfect then they are, but I doubt this will be a problem considering the reasoning behind what's going on. One final thing is I don't understand how her being a hero would hurt them? This is an interesting concept, but surely training at a hero school would gain her popularity, especially with the sports festival, and it would definitely make her stronger, not to mention that she's being trained by proheros, which won't hesitate to protect her. This can be done, but just be careful how you go about it, even if it's just her feeling like she can't get anyone involved for there safety even though at the back of her mind she knows that they'll help her. Other
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This quirk is really interesting, but all I can say is try not to make her overpowered, people with powerful quirks often have to practice a great deal and it takes a long time to get used to them. Mirio is a perfect example of this.
Stats
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These stats are fine, but I recommend making at least one of them a lot lower than the rest, since this balances out the 5 and makes her seem like a more well rounded character.
Final thoughts I really like this character and she would work really well in the universe, very little needs to be improved on in my opinion, but there is always room for improvement, so I suggest focusing on developing her further and seeing where she goes from there.
This is a great character, so really well done!!!
*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you of course do not have to listen to what I've said. This us all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*
