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Here is review for nothing_blah0 Sorry this took so long college is bein a pain and I completely forgot.
My comments will be in bold
Basics and grounding
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Alright definitely give information and develop this because you gotta plan your universe if it's a serious character.
Character information
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Blake Steven, everybody:
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Okay so that personality is hella detailed and what I woukd normally look for in a good character, so well done with that. Unfortunately, not everything here is as detailed. You need to settle on a name and a last name. Science isn't necessarily a hobby either, it's a subject, does he like researching? Or doing practicals? Either was you gotta add more hobbies because most people like more then one thing. Overall, just more detail and planning out.
Relationships
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You gotta develop these further and be careful with an orphaned oc, they're common and normally not written very well. You've got at least name his parents, even if they're not around, they still exist in the same universe as him.
Backstory
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Alright these are details that are the start off a proper Backstory, you just gotta work out the details, like how did his parents die? How are his morals shown as being questionable? Is he naturally intelligent or does he focus purely on his studies? You just gotta string all these things together and put them in a time line, then add some details and bam, Backstory. So focus on this more then everything.
Stats
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Don't ever break boundaries set in Stats, it makes your character seem very over the top and normally I say to balance out a five with a 1 to make sure the character is balanced. Five is still the best of the best, so try not to go over the top.
Final thoughts This character could be pretty cool, but you have an awful lot of development to work on. Focus on his Backstory and I know you've told me why he doesn't have one, but characters with backstories always sound a lot better then characters without. You're clearly good at detail, as shown in his personality, so you just gotta put that into everything else. But that aside, this is a pretty good start.
*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*
