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Designed a new character but want to know others thoughts on it? Want to get some tips on how to make a good character or to be pointed in the right direction? Well, you're in the right place! I'm here to check your guys' OCS an...
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Alright cool. Be careful when introducing a lot of new information to a reader and make sure to spread it out so they don't get lost.
Character information
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The name makes sense since they're a lab subject but maybe include more letters and numbers since you imply they aren't the only test subjects later on and it makes more sense. Overall this is done pretty well and makes sense in the grand scheme of things, just be careful with super intelligent kid characters. They're pretty common and normally done pretty poorly, but I don't think that's an issue here.
Relationships
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Maybe develop these more but apart from that they make sense so that's about it really.
Backstory / other
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I think there's so really cool and interesting concepts here that could be executed well in a story, however this is mainly a backstory section so I want to know about their life before the lab. Why were they separated from their parents? Did something happen with their past life? Stuff like that.
Stats
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I get that they're smart, but don't break Stats set ever please because that automatically makes them seem incredibly op, but apart from that these are fine.
Final thoughts I think that this could be a pretty cool character with some interesting concepts. You just need to work out some bumps and develop them further. But apart from that, good job.
*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*
