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Designed a new character but want to know others thoughts on it? Want to get some tips on how to make a good character or to be pointed in the right direction? Well, you're in the right place! I'm here to check your guys' OCS an...
As seen with my struggle to get information about this character, for some reason wattpad isn't letting me see all the comments posted which is causing me a lot of problems, but I was able to resolve them. Here is an incredibly well thought out character by MisterAtelo
My comments will be in bold.
Basics and grounding
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Oooooooo this concept and story idea seems really interesting.
Character information
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Okay, so this is an incredibly well thought out universe so I doubt I'll be able to point out many issues with this. This is obviously an ancient angelic being so I expect it to be powerful, but since he has been almost thrown out, I also expect him to have lost some abilities. Be careful with your character having so many different forms, it can be really good if written well, but if not it looks like you're trying to make your character more than it really is.
Relationships
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This is interesting, I also love the concept of an incredibly strong being falling for a normal person. Most of this seems realistic, but I feel like that since he grew up (assumed) around the Celestes, shouldn't he have at least one who wanted him to stay and wanted to be near him? This could also add to why he's mad at them, as he was ripped away from his friend. As stated in the backstory, he wants to help free a race, so surely someone from his own kind would agree with him?
Backstory
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Okay damn, if every character's backstory in this story is as detailed as this then good job. The only problem here is the same as the one earlier, surely someone would agree with him about Leading.
This is very well thought out though, so well done to you. Other
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For a god-like character, this is pretty balanced and thought out. Of course, he has a lot of powers which makes him pretty op, but it's balanced out by him struggling in hand to hand. Stats
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I'll give you the same advice I give everyone here, try to have more mid-range areas than low or high, because in reality that's how it works. This one isn't exactly the same as that since the character is a powerful being, but I'll still give you the same advice.
Final thoughts This character and his background are incredibly well thought out, so there's not much at all I can say for improvement. It's a lot easier to critique characters from existing universes because I know their dynamic and what's good or bad, which means that I can't judge original OCS by what's seen as good or bad in eyes of the series if that makes sense? But in my mind, this is a good character, so well done!!!
*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*
