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Designed a new character but want to know others thoughts on it? Want to get some tips on how to make a good character or to be pointed in the right direction? Well, you're in the right place! I'm here to check your guys' OCS an...
Ooooooh a really well though out original character here. Since this one's so long, I'll give feed back during multiple points of each section if it's needed. LovelyHeartCZ
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Ooooooh this actually sounds really cool! I love this twist look on super powers. It's a very interesting concept and a story the I'm sure a lot of people will read.
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It's quite refreshing to have an oc not be this perfect looking dude that's 6ft tall. I like his appearance and that he had a child at a young age, you often see female ocs that have children at a young age, not male ocs.
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I'm genuinely struggling to find things to actually critique with this character because it's so well thought out. His personality seems realistic, but it is very common. You could potentially add aspects about his power. Like since he's protective of his children, he could be paranoid of losing control of his abilities and hurting them, or something along those lines. This will give a view of what we can assume someone dealing with superpowers would feel like in this situation and how they would act.
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