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Designed a new character but want to know others thoughts on it? Want to get some tips on how to make a good character or to be pointed in the right direction? Well, you're in the right place! I'm here to check your guys' OCS an...
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Sounds pretty interesting but be careful when introducing new concepts to the audience.
Character information
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He sounds pretty good so far, there's nothing wrong with him and he's actually a pretty well thought put character. All I can really suggest is go into more detail with his personality but that isn't necessary.
Also I don't think comrades is the right word either, I think whta you're looking for is 'acquaintances'.
Relationships
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This also works pretty well. Just make sure to show the effect of the stuff with his father and that these relationships are developed and effect the character.
Backstory
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This works well for the character but I think you could add more positive events to his earlier life and maybe add more events in general to his later life.
Other
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This works well, I like his powers actually, they're pretty cool.
Stats
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Stats are well balanced so there's no issues here.
Final thoughts All you really need to do is develop him further and add a bit to his Backstory so that he works out better and feels more fleshed out. Just work on developing him more and you should be good to go.
*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*
