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Review 94 // Ayako Shibashima

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by petrichor_idyllic

by petrichor_idyllic

Here is a DR review for sapphicserenity

My comments will be in bold

Basics and grounding /character information

I like the sound of her and this is done pretty well. All I can really say is to add more detail and maybe develop her further, but apart from that she's really cool.

Relationships

Some more development and this could be really good. Make sure these relationships help flesh out and help her grow as a person.

Also she's pretty on point about Nagito let's be honest.

Backstory

This works without the context of V3, but I recommend also developing something to do with that. I don't wanna spoiler anything so like I'm not gonna tell you how, but I'm sure you can figure it out if you have seen/played it.

Either way, this needs more development to make her more fleshed out and realistic.

Other

This works, no issues here.

Stats

These are pretty balanced so there's no issues here.

Final thoughts
This character is pretty well done and I like the sound of her. Just a couple more additions here and there and this character will be good to go.

*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*