Review 82 // Pepper Paterson

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Basics and grounding

Sounds cool and pretty different

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Sounds cool and pretty different.

Character information

She sounds cute, however that's just from her personality

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She sounds cute, however that's just from her personality. The only physical description you've given me is her height which doesn't help paint a detailed image of her. So, definitely add to her appearance description. I like her personality and it works for children of that age.

Relationships

Relationships

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I don't have anything to say here since these are really well fleshed out and clearly have had a lot of thought out into them

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I don't have anything to say here since these are really well fleshed out and clearly have had a lot of thought out into them.

Backstory

She's young so you can get away with this being short, but I do recommend coming up with a couple of more significant points in her life the make her feel more developed

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She's young so you can get away with this being short, but I do recommend coming up with a couple of more significant points in her life the make her feel more developed.

Stats

I recommend lowering at least one of the fives because it's very unlikely a child would be a five in anything and that way it makes everything balanced

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I recommend lowering at least one of the fives because it's very unlikely a child would be a five in anything and that way it makes everything balanced.

Final thoughts
I like the sound of this character but a bit more development and additions to her could really go a long way and make her even better.

*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*

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