Review 92 // Ginkuru Hikaru

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Here is a review for Algid-Gintoki

My guy if you have me review another character please follow my form because the way you do things is not the way I ask and it really does throw a spanner in the works, especially when I have so many reviews to do. I'll do it this time but next time I won't accept it.

My comments will be in bold.

Basics and grounding

This is also a my hero academia oc it just wasn't mentioned here

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This is also a my hero academia oc it just wasn't mentioned here.

Character information

Character information

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Alright these are some pretty good traits and can work well for a character

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Alright these are some pretty good traits and can work well for a character. But I do suggest adding more detail and developing aspects like his personality and adding more unique traits to his personality.

Relationships

Okay these work but maybe add more relationships with other people and add more positive traits to these because there are more to most relationships then one notes

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Okay these work but maybe add more relationships with other people and add more positive traits to these because there are more to most relationships then one notes.

Backstory

This was N/A so definitely add a Backstory and everything.

Other

Other

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This works and there aren't any problems here

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This works and there aren't any problems here. It is a bit hard to wrap your head around how his quirk works so maybe phrase is better but apart from that this is pretty well thought out.

Stats
This was N/A but definitely figure out some stats because hey act like grounding for characters and it really does help.

Extra

Didn't ask for this but add more likes and dislikes because there are more then one thing that people like/dislike

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Didn't ask for this but add more likes and dislikes because there are more then one thing that people like/dislike.

Final thoughts
This is a pretty good character but he could do with some more detail and development to make him an even better character. It's always good starting a character off with their quirk, but don't make it so their entire character is shaped around it. Apart from that, good job.

*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*

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