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Designed a new character but want to know others thoughts on it? Want to get some tips on how to make a good character or to be pointed in the right direction? Well, you're in the right place! I'm here to check your guys' OCS an...
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She seems like an interesting character. All I can say here is add more detailed and unique hobbies and give her a more detailed personality to make her more unique and fleshed out.
Relationships
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I like how you've made bug pastas her enemies, they're murderers and should not be friends. If it were up to me, I wouldn't have an oc that is friends with any of the big boys, but that is up to you and these relationships are pretty good overall.
Backstory
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Okay, having your character end up at the cp mansion is incredibly common and the mansion is more of a fan thing, in none of the big 'canon' creepypastas is it mentioned. You can do this if you want, , but personally, it takes away the scary part of the character. Apart from that, I recommend focusing on the character's personal backstory over her interactions with other ones. So, just flesh out her backstory more and develop that to make her feel more real because that will make it scarier, and whilst looked over nowadays, creepypastas are meant to be scary.
Stats
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These stats are completely fine, I have no problems here.
Final thoughts This could be a really interesting character, I just think she needs to be fleshed out a bit more so that she can feel like a real person that's existed.
*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*
