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Designed a new character but want to know others thoughts on it? Want to get some tips on how to make a good character or to be pointed in the right direction? Well, you're in the right place! I'm here to check your guys' OCS an...
I have another Harry Potter oc here today by ImAKlanceLover
My comments will be in bold
Basics and grounding / character information
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I'm fine with making characters related to canon ones, but I recommend being incredibly careful, especially when they also have feelings for a canon character. It can come across as Marysuish with out them actually being a MarySue. I also recommend coming up with a more unique personality then the common Malfoy jerkishness.
Relationships
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Again, just be careful with your character being related to a canon character and having feelings to another one. You could be called out on it if it's not done incredibly well.
Backstory
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What was life like before then? Did anything of interest happen? Remember, the character's life doesn't just start with Hogwarts. I suggest adding to the back story in order to really flesh out this character and develop her further.
Stats Stats help give your character a balance and give you a written grounding for what your character can and can't do, and how they should and shouldn't act in order to be believable. You wouldn't think it, but they're weirdly helpful.
Final thoughts You need to flesh out your character and develop them further for them to be a unique and interesting character. She isn't a bad character at all, but she could be made even better.
*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you of course do not have to listen to what I've said. This us all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*
