Review 32 // Maki Kurosawa

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Another Bnha oc this time by antiqueelixir

My comments will be in bold

Basics and grounding/character information

Basics and grounding/character information

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I really like her design, she looks really cute

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I really like her design, she looks really cute. Be careful though because the cinnamon roll with a tough past and insecurities is pretty common, but can be cool if done well. I also recommend adding more detailed hobbies to make her feel fleshed out.

Relationships

Relationships

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These relationships are fine, just make sure if you ever make a piece about her that these relationships are well portrayed

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These relationships are fine, just make sure if you ever make a piece about her that these relationships are well portrayed.

Backstory

Okay, this is interesting but be careful with incredibly dark backstories for characters

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Okay, this is interesting but be careful with incredibly dark backstories for characters. If overdone, it can look like it's being made as shock value to make people feel bad for the character.

Other

Cool quirk, I don't have any issues here and I actually like the sound of this

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Cool quirk, I don't have any issues here and I actually like the sound of this.

Stats

Stats

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I recommend only having one high stat in order for your character to remain balanced and likeable

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I recommend only having one high stat in order for your character to remain balanced and likeable.

Extra

Cool, don't see many characters that are sidekicks

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Cool, don't see many characters that are sidekicks.

*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*

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