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Designed a new character but want to know others thoughts on it? Want to get some tips on how to make a good character or to be pointed in the right direction? Well, you're in the right place! I'm here to check your guys' OCS an...
Also, I apologise if this isn't up to my usual standard, it's currently 10 to 6 in the morning and I haven't slept at all, but I'm pretty busy so now'll have to do.
My comments will be in bold
Basics and grounding
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Following the rwby format is always a good thing because the characters are very specific.
Character information
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I like the way she sounds. You said that this at the start of the story and gets more development as time goes on, which is good and that means I don't really have anything to say here.
Most rwby characters' names are linked to a colour, along with their team name. I'm not sure if Ambra is a colour, but if it isn't get that sorted.
Relationships
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These relationships are pretty well detailed and thoughts out, so I don't really have much to say except that you could potentially add some more positive aspects to them.
As far as a love interest goes, I support oc x canon, so if you want a canon character, maybe look for someone who goes against her formal ways, that way there will be a more interesting dynamic. Or, maybe Rubin? I think those two being potential love interests could be an interesting dynamic.
Backstory
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This seems like it'll work for a character of her nature, however, potentially add some more positive traits and points in her life, because ethat way it comes across as more realistic and functional.
Other
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Ooooo her semblance actually sounds really cool so I commend you on that. Her weapon also sounds cool, but it's kinda hard for me to picture, so maybe work on your description of it. Or it might be my lack of sleep but either way. Stats
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These stats are pretty balanced so there's not much I have to add here.
Final thoughts Overall, I quite like the sound of this character. She sounds well thought out and well constructed. But, maybe consider adding some more positive traits to her overall, we don't want overwhelmingly negative character. Apart from that, good job!!
*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*
