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Designed a new character but want to know others thoughts on it? Want to get some tips on how to make a good character or to be pointed in the right direction? Well, you're in the right place! I'm here to check your guys' OCS an...
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I've already made my comments on this universe, even if it was a while back.
Character information
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As per usual, your descriptions and details are pretty good. The character sounds believable in the context on the universe and her personality works nicely. Though, I do recommend adding more detail to the bloodied, battlefield side of her so we can get more insight as to why she's so feared in other lands.
Relationships
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These work but be careful having both parents be dead along with her sibling because characters like that can get a bad rep. Apart from that, make sure to show the effects that these characters have on her and make sure they help develop her.
Backstory
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Well damn. I don't have any issues here with anything, the only one being the dead parents which I've already mentioned. This story is very interesting and draws you in. I felt invested in her story whilst reading that, so good job there. All in all, a very good Backstory.
Other
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Be careful not too make her too op but I guess that's kinda the point so I'll leave it be.
Stats
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Stats are balanced this is fine.
Final thoughts Overall, this is a really good character and I think that she's actually fine the way she is, but you could maybe add more to the character information section of her story, like her personality. Really good character all in all, good job!
*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*
