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Designed a new character but want to know others thoughts on it? Want to get some tips on how to make a good character or to be pointed in the right direction? Well, you're in the right place! I'm here to check your guys' OCS an...
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Alright I recommend coming up with more details for this universe but that's it really.
Character information
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Alright, this works I guess. You gotta be careful using that many contrasting colours because from an art point if view it could look clustered. You really gotta write out a paragraph for the personality because what you given me doesn't actually give a good impression of his character. Also you can't just throw yandere into a personality like it's nothing because it's instantly connected to murder and stalking and you have to be sure not to glamourise these crimes. Maybe expand on his hobbies.
Relationships
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Same as what I mentioned earlier about the yandere. Be sure to develop and flesh out these relationships along with putting names to these people since you've only told me he has relations, not who to.
Backstory
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Alright alright you gotta slow down. There's a lot here and it doesn't feel developed. If you're going to send your character to a mental institute, you need to figure out what mental disorder it is they have and show the symptoms. Research that stuff. You have to show and decribe the development and reaction to things. You need to describe what happened to his father, his mother's reactions, other key events in his life. Think this over and if nothing else, add more detail.
Other
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Cool I guess don't know what to say here.
Stats
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These stats are balanced so they're fine
Final thoughts This character has some potential but you gotta sit down and work it all out. Details are important and this feels like the overview of a character. Develop him as far as you can.
*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*
