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Designed a new character but want to know others thoughts on it? Want to get some tips on how to make a good character or to be pointed in the right direction? Well, you're in the right place! I'm here to check your guys' OCS an...
How many characters are you gonna give me for this universe Utatane_Piko_V2?? Lol I don't mind, but this is the fourth character I think for this universe, so I think I'm beginning to understand it more.
My comments will be in bold
Basics and grounding
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You know the drill by now.
Character information
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As per usual, your characters are well written and fleshed out. All I have to say is make sure to tackle these topics with respect and make sure personalities are balanced with positive and negative traits. Positive traits added in this case.
Relationships
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These relationships are clearly well thought out, as expected, just make sure they are detailed and explained in the plot especially when the characters are in the current plot.
Backstory
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Interesting, you don't see many IVF characters so that's pretty cool. There's not much wrong with this backstory but be careful with the whole 'special marking that's significant' thing, it's scarily common. Though, done well it can be a pleasurable experience so it should be fine if we'll write.
Other
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This is a really cool skill, just make sure you explain how the animals taste his blood because that seems like a bit of an issue.
Stats
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Stats are good and balanced so good job with that one.
Final thoughts I'm sorry this is so short but as I've said in the past, I'm not going to look for problems where there isn't any. I honestly can't see much that needs improvement with this character and they seem to fit well in the universe, so good job.
*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*
