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Designed a new character but want to know others thoughts on it? Want to get some tips on how to make a good character or to be pointed in the right direction? Well, you're in the right place! I'm here to check your guys' OCS an...
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Sounds pretty interesting.
Character information
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All I can say here is well done, when I ask for these pieces of information this is the kinda stuff I look for. Detailed and thought out explanations. Really good job here.
Relationships
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These relationships are pretty good and I don't think there's any issues here. Just make sure these characters have an effect on Jophiel.
Backstory
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Honestly, this a pretty good plot. Definitely something I'd read. This definitely doesn't feel half *ssed as I only asked for a summery. However, I think you need to think baout his life before all this, like his childhood and meeting the other people in his life. Maybe add a bit more detail and show the relationship between the angel and the hunter and this should be pretty good.
Other
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The main issue with this character is that he's pretty op. Maybe take away a couple of these powers so that he feels more balanced. I understand that he's a supernatural creature but even so, having characters so op means that it feels like there aren't any real stakes and that makes it hard to route for them.
Stats
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Stats are balanced so this is fine.
Final thoughts I really like this character. He's well developed and works in his universe. There's only really a couple of things you need to work on but apart form that, really good job.
*My critiques are simply at your request and to help improve your character. It is not my intention to cause any offence and you, of course, do not have to listen to what I've said. This is all just a bit of fun and I apologise if I have done any kind of damage*
